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    Hyphen

    Hi--this is the sentence. If you can rewrite it more clearly please feel free. But my concern in this post is the hypenation used to describe the kitchen. Is it correct? Is the description vivid?

    Until Nick left home to marry Pearl, he, his parents, his unmarried sisters and Rosie and Bobby dined together each evening in the their large old fashioned, yellow-enamel-painted kitchen. Now Bobby and Nick had certainly become more than friends.



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    Unless it's somehow important, I'd just lose the "yellow-enamel-painted". If it's important, I'd say "painted in yellow enamel". So either (suggestions in red):

    Until Nick left home to marry Pearl, he, his parents, his unmarried sisters, and Rosie and Bobby dined each evening in their large, old-fashioned kitchen. Now Bobby and Nick certainly enjoyed more than friendship.

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    Until Nick left home to marry Pearl, he, his parents, his unmarried sisters, and Rosie and Bobby dined each evening in their large, old-fashioned kitchen painted in yellow enamel. Now Bobby and Nick certainly enjoyed more than friendship.

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    Perfect. Thank you.

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    If you really want to call attention to the yellow pain you could use another sentence to say, "The kitchen was painted with yellow enamel, the kind that went out in the 70s along with disco and leisure suits." [or whatever time period; I am not an expert on yellow enamel.]

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