Thanks to you all. I finally decided to delete the last sentence altogether. So it reads thus:

“Thank you.” He leaned forward and touched her hand, so glad she was here, and a vivid memory came to his mind. From a time before everything, before the straps and belt buckles, before it all fell apart.

The memory was of them as very small children, running into the sea, laughing.


It didn't win the contest I entered it in intially, but that's life. I entered it BEFORE I deleted the last sentence. Now it has that change at the end, and a major change at the start.

So it still has legs in the competition world! Hopefully.....