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    Please feel free to comment....Your opinions are valuable to me..."A Way to Play"

    A Way to Play

    There’s got to be a better way
    A better way to play
    There’s got to be a better way
    A way to play today

    Like poker in an old saloon
    The cards in every hand
    A call, a bluff, that cheating stuff
    A six gun takes a stand

    Like chess among the willows
    Knights at queen’s command
    Pawns do all the dirty work
    So proudly she may stand

    Like checkers on a porch swing
    I’ll jump you if I dare
    Then king me and I’ll double back
    And catch you unaware

    Like marbles in a circle white
    Too many just can’t stay
    Shoot them and then kick them out
    Then take them all away

    Throw the dice, the same way twice
    Or make the seven shine
    Just play nice and pay the price
    It does no good to whine

    The games we play have much to say
    About that which we hold dear
    They speak to things we treasure
    And play upon our fears

    The art of war, that one big score
    The chance to beat the best
    The ego calling all the shots
    While compassion takes a rest

    This I say, for this I pray
    Let the cards fall where they may
    Surely, there’s enough in you
    To play another day
    Last edited by Tbabbit; 06-24-2012 at 04:57 PM.



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    Stanzas 1, 2, and 4 have a good strong iambic rhythm; good strong rhyme - a, b, c, b; good strong meter - 4, 3, 4, 3. The rest of the stanzas have good rhyme, but the rhythm and meter are nonexistent. Any particular reason for that?

    Why did you write this poem?
    Last edited by John Oberon; 06-25-2012 at 05:07 AM.

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