i've just started submitting with this query but i keep wanting to improve. thoughts welcome. thanks!
Dear name of agent
Colin Wyle has nightmares of violence and horrifying visions of Duemos, a female demon who is a purveyor of souls. For months he experiences death and violence through the eyes of strangers. When he dreams of a close friend, Yolanda, battling an abusive husband for her life and the lives of her children, Colin takes action and kills the abuser. The next day the local news covers the story, confirming the dream was actually reality. Now, in his quest for redemption, he must confront Duemos and her dark influence--What he finds is the revelation of his origin and a truth beyond this world.
Sinners & Saints is a paranormal thriller complete at 65,000 words. It is my first novel and book one of a potential four book series. Readers of Ted Dekker’s novels Immanuel’s Veins and The Priest’s Graveyard will like this.
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Thank you for your time and consideration.