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  1. #1
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    Call my name

    Call my name,
    Hold my hand,
    Pull me back
    From the darkness.

    Donít let go,
    Of my hand,
    Hold me here
    Here beside you.

    I can sense that you donít understand
    I can hear your quiet sobs
    But my dear, canít you feel it now
    Iím already gone.

    Just let me tell you how proud I am
    To have spent my years with you
    And my dear, our world is safe now
    I leave it all to you.

    Say my name,
    Hold my hand,
    Let me go
    Into the darkness.

    Time to let go,
    Of the past,
    And I let go
    Still loving you

    Now the sounds of war have died away
    The wounded and enslaved brought home
    But my dear, donít try to save my life
    Iím already gone.

    And I cannot find the words to say
    To explain my choice to you
    But my dear, I love you and leave
    My legacy to you.

    Say my name,
    Hold my hand,
    Let me go
    Into the darkness

    Time goes on,
    Stand up strong,
    And I let go,
    Always loving you.



  2. #2
    martin shaw
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    To tired to critique, but I must say I like it.

    Quick quick quick... I thought it was going to be some cheesy dark ****e? But I am pleasantly surprised.

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    Thank you.

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    Aver0n 2o11
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    I keep hearing (in my head): say my name, say my name, say baby I love you... (I think it's by Destiny's Child)

    Other than that... what Martin said. Very good poem

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    I like it.
    ďPut it before them briefly so they will read it, clearly so they will appreciate it, picturesquely so they will remember it and, above all, accurately so they will be guided by its light.Ē
    -Joseph Pulitzer

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