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    PIGGING OUT:D

    A DAY ON FOOD
    (c)by moi

    Food is good
    Even when you're not in the mood
    You eat everything in sight
    A whole box of the cereal 'Just Right'
    Two German Chocolate cake
    Your diet you forsake
    Out of clothes you went
    Now you have to wear a tent
    Breakfast at six
    A whole box of pancake mix
    A snack at eight
    You don't care 'bout the overweight
    Another snack at ten
    Five milkshakes you blend
    For your twelve o'clcock lunch
    It's spare ribs, rice, mashed potatoes and fruit punch
    Two o'clock snack
    It's oreos and sandwich icecream by the pack
    At four o'clock
    Cheese, crackers and roast pork
    What's on the menu at six?
    Could it be celery sticks?
    Oh, no. French fries, hamburbers and hot dogs
    You'd even throw in some frogs
    Still on the go at eight
    Ham and eggs and hot chocolate
    At ten o'clock you still want more
    So you eat the whole refrigerator







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    Aver0n 2o11
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    Re: PIGGING OUT:D

    Very good, very delicious, you even managed to make it rhyme The only critique I have is the lack of stanzas. Of course there's no rule that says you must have stanzas and verses but it does make it easier on the eyes. Off to eat...

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    Re: PIGGING OUT:D

    That happens to me about once a month....then the rest of the month I'm on celery sticks.

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