I'm editing my novel I wrote shortly after I graduated high school. I have no one anywhere else to get their opinions. I accept good and bad comments as long as they are honest. I want to become a better writer.
She continued to wait.
Alex was planning to escape her hometown. Her first problem – escape the castle undetected. The second problem – getting the witch doctor to change her into a human.
Alex knew the truth and no one believed her except her best friend. She wanted to escape and get away. Alexandra was tired of being a princess in the castle of Crystal Waters.
Alex continued to wait in her bedroom, watching through her hole she has for a window. There were a few mermaids left to head home to bed.
Many villagers had been intoxicated for today was Alexandra’s twenty-first birthday. She figured tonight would be the best time to escape.
I know it's not a very big example. I'm trying to rewrite and I want to know if I'm headed off to a good start? Please help!