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  1. #11
    Beautiful Loser
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Amber’s shake was cold, limp and lacking in commitment.

    Amber's handshake was cold and limp.



  2. #12
    Rogue Mutt
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Grimaced, the state psychologist shakes hands with her patient. "Good afternoon."

    Grimaced? Que?

  3. #13
    Keith .
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Rhonda, I'm curious about this from your bio.

    I've written four national best-sellers you've probably heard about. Each of them has been a number one best-seller for a minimum of 13 years.

    I don't read from your field but this sounds, well, each was number one for at least 13 years? Am I reading this wrong?

  4. #14
    jayce
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    If you Google the title "Mental Illness French Kissed Me and I Kissed Back", all you get is another forum where Miss Rhonda posted a similar profile.

    Troll.

  5. #15
    Frank Baron
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Despite a minor quibble or three, noted by the folks above, I read it all the way to the end and I rarely do that with work posted here. Dialogue, when used well, is a great way to reveal glimpses of character and propel a story forward. And you handle it quite well.

  6. #16
    Ronda Hamilton
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Kieth that was a joke. I thought that would be clear when I said I'd written four books and all of them were number one for 13 straight years.
    Jayce I'm not a troll. When I used that bit in my bio elsewhere people loved the joke, so I used it here.
    I'll change my bio because I thought it was clear that was a joke (I thought it was funny-bummer), and the last thing I want is for people to think I'm a troll.

    Thank you for all the great feedback on this first section of this novel. I wrote it for nano and it's had very little revision so this helps a lot. I'll change the tag problems and consider the other things you guys brought up.

    After I do that should I re-post with the changes or just move on and post the next section?

  7. #17
    jayce
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Troll assessment retracted.

  8. #18
    Don Daffron
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    I don’t understand this investigating posters stuff. One nut bitched he had checked on me and couldn’t find any dirt. WTF! Is this a writing site or a padded cell? Who cares who the poster is?

  9. #19
    Beautiful Loser
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Long-time posters here are very territorial, Don. Just like dogs are.

  10. #20
    Ronda Hamilton
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    Re: Peep Show Girl

    Jayce thank you for taking that back.

    So do I repost with your suggested changes or just post the next section? I don't see any 'edit post' button? I feel like an idiot because this site is unlike any I've been on and I'm struggling with very basic navigation issues.

    Thanks again

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