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  1. #11
    L Bea
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    Re: Feedback, Please, Version 2.0

    RM,

    This is great. MUCH improved.

    About the fly thing:

    I get that you're standing firm on this but consider just adjusting the dial a tad. When you say carving chunks, my mind visualizes <u>large</u> slabs of meat being hauled off by these Mr. T Flies. Perhaps just tone it down a tad. Chunks seem really big to me. Maybe they're boring holes or something. Or if someone were saying it, then the exaggeratory tone of carving chunks works better.

    It's up to you. I think the piece is really coming along!

    Bea~



  2. #12
    RM Stanberry
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    Re: Feedback, Please, Version 2.0

    Thanks all. Platinum Attaboys to each. Will rework the flies.

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