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  1. #1
    Rosie L Brewer
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    " what is eternalty?

    Eternalty is a city made of stone, where a great king lives
    named Christ, who once lived on the earth among men.he was
    crucified on a mount called " calvary "far out on a hill on a day the sun refused to shine for a half of the day.
    A city far beyound the blue and the chrystal skies, high as
    the stars and as white as clouds.A city where immortals live ,who once roamed the earth A city where everything is
    made of stone. In Eternalty lives this great king,
    eventhought he was crucified,yet he lives today.He is king
    of Eternalty,where he sits on a throne and rules the world.
    His head is "stone", his feet are "stone", his eyes are"
    stone", his ears are "stone", his hands are "stone", his body is "stone". In Eternalty everything is "stone".
    The people are "stone", and they are his servants, the
    women are "stone", the children are "stone", the animals
    are "stone" too. In eternalty everything is made of "stone", and is immortal. Someday I will go to live in
    Eternalty.God said, "whosoever overcometh I will make a
    pillar in the Temple of My God, and he shall go no more out............................................... ......



  2. #2
    Rosie L Brewer
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    Rosie L Brewer wrote:
    >
    > Eternalty is a city made of stone, where a great king
    > lives
    > named Christ, who once lived on the earth among men.He was
    > crucified on a mount called " calvary "far out on a hill on a
    > day the sun refused to shine for a half of the day.
    > A city far beyound the blue and the chrystal skies, high as
    > the stars and as white as clouds.A city where immortals live
    > ,who once roamed the earth . A city where everything is
    > made of stone. In Eternalty lives this great king,
    > eventhought he was crucified,yet he lives today.He is king
    > of Eternalty,where he sits on a throne and rules the world.
    > His head is "stone", his feet are "stone", his eyes are"
    > stone", his ears are "stone", his hands are "stone", his body
    > is "stone". In Eternalty everything is "stone".
    > The people are "stone", and they are his servants, the
    > women are "stone", the children are "stone", the animals
    > are "stone" too. In eternalty everything is made of "stone",
    > and is immortal. Someday I will go to live in
    > Eternalty.God said, "whosoever overcometh I will make a
    > pillar in the Temple of My God, and he shall go no more
    > out............................................... ......

  3. #3
    M T
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    er, did you want a critique?

  4. #4
    Roy Abrahams
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    Eternity is a warm puppy.

    Wait, that is supposed to be "happiness is a warm kitty."

    At any rate, I'm wondering if we've been proslytised, shammed, or just irked. For myself, I feel irked. What in blue blazes does paraphrasing mythology have to do with writing? The original version wasn't much for inspiring me to singing its praises.

    Arggggghhhhhhhh....pagan nonsense.

  5. #5
    M T
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    Maybe she's a traveling preacher? Or maybe she's stoned like the rest of her characters?

  6. #6
    Roy Abrahams
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    And only M.T. could have come up with that one. ROFLMSAO.

  7. #7
    Murg
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    From recent posts on quite a few topics, methinks it's spring break again.

  8. #8
    M T
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    what is ROFLMSAO

    What does ROFLMSAO mean? Wait! I'll take a guess....

    R--Rude
    O--Odorous
    F--Floozy
    L--Looking
    M--Miserable
    S--Stupid
    A--And
    o--Old

    Hey! Are you talking about me?!

  9. #9
    Molly B.
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    Rosie,

    Your imagery is beautiful, but no one is quite sure what you want as far as writing is concerned.

    Cheers!
    Molly

    P.S. to Roy - "Pagan" means you DON'T believe, wink, wink.

  10. #10
    Roy Abrahams
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    Re: " what is eternalty?

    Molly, dear......I always thought "pagan" was similar to "infidel dogs." Arf!

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