Author: Joe Zeff
Date:   11-02-09 15:43

I read fantasy, and for me, your hook doesn't. The first sentence of your second paragraph is better, but it's still BTDT for me. I've asked it before and I'm asking again: What makes your book different from all the other fantasies out there? If you can't answer that question there's no reason sending out queries because neither agents nor publishers are looking for rehashes and twice-told tales.