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Author: Julian Ruberte (24.139.118.---)
Date: 08-28-08 18:46
What if the opening of my story, the first page, is something like this:
Volume I: THE TOXIN STRAIN
“The first things in life are unforgettable. Sometimes though, the things one cannot forget are those that hurt the most.”
Kritolnay Cilachi, former ruler of the galaxy Haxlost.
“Forget all preconceptions. Imagine not a reptilian beast with fangs and wings. A Dragon is not simply this. That is what a Dragon can become. See in your mind a human, no different than yourself. That is a Dragon. Only we are not limited by the human body or by the dragon beast form. We can transcend, becoming so much more.”
From the essay, What is a Dragon?
Should I send it when an agent asks for the first five pages or skip it and just start with the chapters?
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Re: Quick question |
Author: leslee (---.lsl-la.com)
Date: 08-28-08 19:10
Just my opinion:
No, do not include it. And if your entire book is written like this, please do an edit before you contact any agents.
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Re: Quick question |
Author: Keith . (---.dhcp.spbg.sc.charter.com)
Date: 08-28-08 20:16
What the hell did I just read?
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concider the above topic..... |
Author: Stupid Writers (---.254.221.8.Dial1.Denver1.Level3.net)
Date: 08-28-08 20:56
it will really help you... just copy my awesome example...
thanks... yes, yes, thank you.. ;)
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Re: concider the above topic..... |
Author: Julian Ruberte (24.139.118.---)
Date: 08-28-08 21:08
Sorry guys. Embarrassed blush. I should have explained what it was, or what I originally intended. Anyhow, it's supposed to be a fake epigraph like the ones Herbert used in Dune. I suppose the first one is really unnecessary but the second one was put after I posted samples on here and everyone asked me to describe what I meant when I said Dragon.
And no leslee, the rest of the manuscript is not written like that. I wrote in that style to show the writer was pompous and full of himself, things I can assure you I am not.
Anyway, that being said, my question still remains, if my book opens with an epigraph, should I send it or skip it, or better yet, delete it?
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Re: concider the above topic..... |
Author: Keith . (---.dhcp.spbg.sc.charter.com)
Date: 08-28-08 21:26
JMO.
Julian, use some common sense and think about this. Here's how you begin your post after a few people read your opening.
Sorry guys. Embarrassed blush. I should have explained what it was, or what I originally intended. Anyhow, it's supposed to be ...
If you're embarrassed you didn't explain the opening of your book before asking someone to read it, do you really want to use this passage to introduce an agent to your novel? Are you going to preface page 1 with, "This is supposed to be ....?" Luck.
km
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Re: concider the above topic..... |
Author: Julian Ruberte (24.139.118.---)
Date: 08-28-08 21:37
You're right Keith. I've never used this when I query agents but it suddenly dawned on me that if I didn't include it early on, then the agent might go crazy on me or something for hiding it from him/her. I guess that's why I posted it here. But yeah, that just means I keep not including it. And actually, you named the two quotes better than me. They're prefaces to the stories, like those crappy maps before Eragon. Anyway, thanks.
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Re: concider the above topic..... |
Author: Sapphire Savvy (76.251.180.---)
Date: 08-29-08 13:43
Forget all preconceptions. Imagine not a reptilian beast with fangs and wings. A Dragon is not simply this. That is what a Dragon can become. See in your mind a human, no different than yourself. That is a Dragon. Only we are not limited by the human body or by the dragon beast form. We can transcend, becoming so much more.”
If you toned this down, though, it would make a killer hook in a query.
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