Forum: Writing Critique

Pulling into the parking lot, Peter was taken back to the early days of the business. Hammond Lock & Key began as a small locksmith business. It was...

Hunted Chapter 1 ...

Here are the next couple of pages. Be aware - the language is a bit salty. Chapter 1 Confusion cont'd. The evolution of the Universal...

I would like some feedback on the following excerpt from my novel. Your honest opinion is important to me, Thank you. Chapter 1 - Confusion ...

Chapter 1 revised continued ***** Casey was scared. He didn’t know what had just happened but he knew it was bad. “Damn you Jim why weren’t...

I don't usually do flash. I am more of a novel and short story gal! But this was for a contest and it didn't place. Might be because it is crap......

Mom was desperate to be with my dad regardless of what that looked like. He didn’t live with us, of course, but I assume he felt he had fulfilled...

Space Chapter 1 Milikos Drift I stared at Keo's eyes. So crystal clear, I could see the tiny blood vessels spreading out like broken spider...

For the heck of it I decided to write a story in second-person (you instead of I or he/she). You think it's too weird or what? The thirtieth...

This is an excerpt from my memoir on the Iraq war. It hasn't been edited or revised, and there are possibly some bad sentence structures and what...

I'm messing around with starting a comedy fantasy. What do people think? Worth continuing? This is, of course, simply first draft.

I am trying to get the hang of this ‘show don’t just tell’ thing. I started this Fantasy/Y.A. piece the other day and I am wondering if I am...

I apologize for posting this here since it's not where it should be, but I don't have access to the query forum despite registering for the forum. As...

I have been working on incorporating these flashbacks/dreamscapes into my work. In the story, the father has a psychotic break and the point is to...

Calling Moderator: Where can I post the synopsis and the blurb for my book for a critique or help? Is this the correct section? Thanks/

This is the first chapter of my lion story which for now I have titled Pride Search. I start with a past to present shift and a present to past...

Your offer to critique is most appreciated, thank you in advance for your time and expertise. This chapter occurs 10,500 words into the story. ...

*Italicised* ONE The instructions played like a looped audio track in Jack's head. *It's imperative, Jack, wait for the green light. The...

Chapter One, Freedom Honorably discharged from the Army at Fort Bragg, North Carolina, 23 months and 29 days after being taken from him, Lefty again...