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  1. Exclamation Sticky Thread Sticky: What to expect when submitting work for critique: *Read Before You Post*

    Please limit posts to 1000 words or less. If your post contains graphic sexual content, violence or obscenity, please make a note in the subject...

    Started by Victoria‎, 08-24-2011 02:34 PM
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    08-24-2011, 02:34 PM Go to last post
  1. The After Burn - REVISED Prologue w/P1 of Chapter 1 - 1,480 words

    Here is the whole revised prologue and the first paragraph of Chapter 1 -- posted to correct issues with POV, extraneous dialogue, action, subject...

    Started by Diem Seven‎, 06-26-2011 09:31 PM
    • Replies: 4
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    07-08-2011, 10:37 AM Go to last post
  2. Opening paragraphs to a new novel

    So I think we all know that the opening to a piece of writing has to be some of the best, and many times its less than. Well, the following is my...

    Started by Oisin Ni Bhaoill‎, 07-03-2011 06:59 PM
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    07-07-2011, 11:15 PM Go to last post
  3. The Revenge - Partial First Chapter.

    Chapter 1 - The Theft He carefully hid his motorbike in the foliage on the bank of the lake. He could not afford any surprise sprung by some...

    Started by Adnan Khan‎, 07-01-2011 03:53 AM
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    • Replies: 11
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    07-04-2011, 11:49 PM Go to last post
  4. Hollar Dollar - REVISED

    If you aren't sick of me yet, would you mind looking over the revised version? I've been adding in all the amazing suggestions I received and wanted...

    Started by Amy Lou‎, 06-22-2011 07:27 PM
    5 Pages
    1 2 3 ... 5
    • Replies: 48
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    06-30-2011, 09:15 PM Go to last post
  5. The After Burn: Prologue Part 2: 550 Words - WARNING: Abuse, Language

    This is Part 2 and the end of the prologue. Part 1 is posted in another thread. Read that first if you want to know what's going on. ;) Thanks for...

    Started by Diem Seven‎, 06-25-2011 10:02 AM
    • Replies: 8
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    06-26-2011, 09:00 PM Go to last post
  6. The After Burn: Prologue Part 1: 925 words - WARNING: Child Abuse

    This is the revised first part of the prologue of 'The After Burn'. I will also be posting the second part. Thanks for reading and commenting! :) ...

    Started by Diem Seven‎, 06-25-2011 09:52 AM
    • Replies: 1
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    06-26-2011, 01:24 PM Go to last post
  7. Dreams of Refuge - Chapter 10 - Rewrite

    Okay! Here's the edit/rewrite. Chapter 10 Locked away in the bathroom, Gemma tried to silence her weeps. Her skin was pale; her lips were blue....

    Started by Shaun .‎, 06-22-2011 02:01 PM
    4 Pages
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    06-26-2011, 11:19 AM Go to last post
  8. Tainted Waters (tentative title) - 1600 words

    Ok this is part of my 1st chapter (not the 1st part though) and I just want to get a feel for if its reading properly, if it seems realistic, and if...

    Started by Will Prendergast‎, 06-18-2011 01:31 AM
    • Replies: 9
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    06-26-2011, 01:52 AM Go to last post
  9. Critique! Start of a short story.

    This is a short starting extract of my short story which I haven't name yet. Be as ruthless as necessary: Hunting, gathering, walking. Ditto,...

    Started by Chimere Mba‎, 06-22-2011 11:08 AM
    • Replies: 3
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    06-24-2011, 10:58 PM Go to last post
  10. Mr Tom *a bit of fun*

    Hi, I started writing this today for my four year old son, inspired by two orphaned kittens I rescued last week. I'm trying to make it fun and...

    Started by Leanne Wherrett‎, 06-22-2011 12:06 PM
    • Replies: 5
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    06-24-2011, 10:27 PM Go to last post
  11. Label Whore Chpt. 1

    A few months ago I sent out query letters to agents about this novel and about 5 agents requested partial manuscripts. However after I sent the...

    Started by Dustin Wright‎, 06-23-2011 10:08 AM
    • Replies: 9
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    06-24-2011, 08:06 AM Go to last post
  12. Critique! Start of a short story.

    This is the start of a short story so be as ruthless as you can. Hunting, gathering, walking. Ditto, ditto, ditto. Again, again. Every day. Men...

    Started by Chimere Mba‎, 06-22-2011 11:19 AM
    • Replies: 3
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    06-23-2011, 07:45 AM Go to last post
  13. Dreams of Refuge - Chapter 10 (1st 1/2) - 899 words

    Content Warning - Rape Trapped in an abusive home, 16 yr old Gemma and 12 yr old George have managed to utilize their imaginations in ways to cope...

    Started by Shaun .‎, 06-20-2011 06:26 PM
    4 Pages
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    • Replies: 38
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    06-22-2011, 11:17 AM Go to last post
  14. Hollar Dollar

    Hi everyone. Here's a short piece I've been working on, once again working on the craft of writing. I'm really trying to be specific, intentional...

    Started by Amy Lou‎, 06-19-2011 05:52 PM
    5 Pages
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    • Replies: 41
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    06-22-2011, 08:54 AM Go to last post
  15. Prologue excerpt: The after burn: 1,000 words

    This is the beginnings of the prologue in my manuscript, The After Burn. All insights and observations welcome. His pudgy, bowed legs peddled...

    Started by Diem Seven‎, 06-15-2011 07:37 PM
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    • Replies: 12
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    06-20-2011, 10:09 AM Go to last post
  16. First few pages of Chapter 1

    So, the manuscript is about 80% written, and I just started editing from the beginning. I will post the first few pages of the first chapter, and I...

    Started by Kyle Anderson‎, 06-13-2011 09:49 AM
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    • Replies: 28
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    06-17-2011, 06:31 AM Go to last post
  17. First segment of long-ish short story-> Critique Welcomed!

    We’ve been riding for God alone knows how many miles now. Each time I hit a speed-breaker, my muscles tense involuntarily and it hurts so bad I want...

    Started by Sid Maul‎, 06-13-2011 11:19 AM
    • Replies: 4
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    06-16-2011, 10:56 PM Go to last post
  18. My newborn.....

    Okay, while I wait to see if my firstborn is a hit with anyone out there, I have finally moved on to my latest. Does this intrigue you (would you...

    Started by Debbi Voisey‎, 06-11-2011 08:02 AM
    • Replies: 5
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    06-13-2011, 08:25 AM Go to last post
  19. Potential prologue material for current WIP

    OK, I have decided that I've got to get crackin' on my WIP again or it will never get wings and fly. Can't have that. So here is the intro to the...

    Started by Jennifer Hord‎, 06-04-2011 05:59 PM
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    • Replies: 15
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    06-13-2011, 03:25 AM Go to last post
  20. Prologue

    This hasn't been looked through in grammar nor commas or spelling. It was rather quickly translated from Danish to English by me last night so I...

    Started by Rikke Jessen‎, 06-11-2011 08:15 AM
    • Replies: 4
    • Views: 2,601
    06-12-2011, 03:33 AM Go to last post

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