Forum: Writing Critique

A few months ago I sent out query letters to agents about this novel and about 5 agents requested partial manuscripts. However after I sent the...

This is the start of a short story so be as ruthless as you can. Hunting, gathering, walking. Ditto, ditto, ditto. Again, again. Every day. Men...

Content Warning - Rape Trapped in an abusive home, 16 yr old Gemma and 12 yr old George have managed to utilize their imaginations in ways to cope...

Hi everyone. Here's a short piece I've been working on, once again working on the craft of writing. I'm really trying to be specific, intentional...

This is the beginnings of the prologue in my manuscript, The After Burn. All insights and observations welcome. His pudgy, bowed legs peddled...

So, the manuscript is about 80% written, and I just started editing from the beginning. I will post the first few pages of the first chapter, and I...

We’ve been riding for God alone knows how many miles now. Each time I hit a speed-breaker, my muscles tense involuntarily and it hurts so bad I want...

Okay, while I wait to see if my firstborn is a hit with anyone out there, I have finally moved on to my latest. Does this intrigue you (would you...

OK, I have decided that I've got to get crackin' on my WIP again or it will never get wings and fly. Can't have that. So here is the intro to the...

This hasn't been looked through in grammar nor commas or spelling. It was rather quickly translated from Danish to English by me last night so I...

I took the critique of a publisher, as they told me the prologue was too confusing and unfocused, and I stripped it down and made it more...

Hi again, After posting my first chapter of John's Story, I've reviewed the opening, although I know many of you liked it and decided to have this...

Hello again. I was working on my story, and I found that I like this scene, but I'm not entirely sure if I have the General's responses and such...

I'm thinking about scraping this entirely. I am finding that it is confusing readers and is not cohesive to the rest of the novel. Let me know your...

Hi, This is my opening chapter for my new novel. It's open to critique but please don't be too harsh as it is a first draft. Also, please be...

Chapter One Danny thinks I’m nuts talking to strangers like I do, but what does he know, right? And it’s not like strangers on the street that...

I've been getting a lot of helpful suggestions on my query letter, so I'm going to post some portions of my book on this forum for critique. I'm open...

This is the first couple of hundred words in a story I'm writing about a marriage break-up. Feedback would be appreciated. Thanks “Michelle...

Hi everyone, it's been a while since I've posted anything. I'm taking a break from my book to work on my writing and trying to do small pieces so I...