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  1. Exclamation Sticky Thread Sticky: What to expect when submitting work for critique: *Read Before You Post*

    Please limit posts to 1000 words or less. If your post contains graphic sexual content, violence or obscenity, please make a note in the subject...

    Started by Victoria‎, 08-24-2011 01:34 PM
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  1. repost: ch1/pt2

    From on his knees with his chest to the stone, Dorren slid his right hand around the base. Listening for signs of the overseers approach, he slid his...

    Started by voodoogator‎, 07-19-2012 02:40 AM
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  2. Short Story-Perspectives-Some Adult Language

    Hi guys :) If any of you would be so kind as to provide me with feedback, I would be most appreciative. I can take it. ...

    Started by rogue writer‎, 07-07-2012 11:10 PM
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    07-15-2012, 09:26 PM Go to last post
  3. No Mercy for a Newbie: The beginning of my thriller Murderhouse

    It's the first 1,000 words. Thanks in advance. -====-==- It is clear that I am dying, though no one has said as much. It is a Tuesday morning...

    Started by johnjwinters‎, 07-11-2012 01:06 PM
    fbi, killer, murderhouse, serial
    • Replies: 6
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    07-14-2012, 01:50 PM Go to last post
  4. Bane... part 2 (had word limit)

    Familiar roof, his idol posters. It was seven am. That was some impression of Quinn D’Arion. Had his relatives been lying? Still, the dream could be...

    Started by ilkar‎, 07-12-2012 04:35 AM
    • Replies: 2
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    07-13-2012, 03:29 AM Go to last post
  5. Is this beginning too dark for Young Adult? Contains violence.

    I suppose rain is fitting for this moment. Standing above a grave wouldn’t feel quite right without rain. It helps wash off the blood, too. My...

    Started by Aeslynn‎, 05-02-2012 09:45 AM
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    1 2
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    07-12-2012, 08:39 PM Go to last post
  6. okay, having a go at show-don't-tell, with a different opening

    The body on the slab was not that of Alec Darrow. Surely, it was someone else. Some other poor soul who had found themselves on the business end of...

    Started by Jennifer Hord‎, 06-18-2012 08:22 PM
    • Replies: 6
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    07-12-2012, 04:40 AM Go to last post
  7. First page reincarnation

    REINCARNATION is the third installment of my science fiction saga. All thoughts and comments welcome. Earth's moon, Luna, was clearly visible yet...

    Started by MUSKETTER 3‎, 07-08-2012 06:57 PM
    • Replies: 6
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    07-11-2012, 08:54 AM Go to last post
  8. Sandbar Chapter 1

    Is the first chapter in need of more work? Sandbar Chapter 1 I lie with my face in the sand not because I am done for, but it is the only...

    Started by Tobias Garrett‎, 06-24-2012 08:22 AM
    • Replies: 5
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    06-26-2012, 11:44 AM Go to last post
  9. Prologue of my Drama/Thriller

    I am currently working on a book and I was looking for some critiques for an excerpt from the Prologue of my Drama/Thriller "Save Me." I'm 16 years...

    Started by gregSMT‎, 06-14-2012 11:12 PM
    2 Pages
    1 2
    drama, mystery, serial killer, thriller
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    06-22-2012, 02:57 PM Go to last post
  10. Dream Sequence/Terrifying Memory: Warning - Violent

    WARNING: This passage contains somewhat graphic violence and implies previous murders. ............................................ The...

    Started by CAlexandria‎, 06-20-2012 06:36 AM
    • Replies: 2
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    06-21-2012, 04:56 AM Go to last post
  11. first 3 pages of dark humor work#1 (mild profanity 2 curse words)

    I had excerpts of this work published before as mini short stories but this is sort of my prologue / first chapter. Just overall concerned about the...

    Started by s0618345‎, 04-08-2012 08:41 AM
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    06-19-2012, 10:26 AM Go to last post
  12. the dilemma of overly florid speech

    I love words. A lot. I'm one of those people that is not past picking up a dictionary and perusing it in moments of severe boredom. But I've been...

    Started by Jennifer Hord‎, 06-16-2012 12:41 PM
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    06-18-2012, 05:51 PM Go to last post
  13. Sam to his Friends

    Hi all, I wonder if you would be kind enough to have a look at a piece of my writing and let me know what you think? It is the opening to a...

    Started by Andy Brown‎, 06-17-2012 12:52 AM
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    06-18-2012, 08:41 AM Go to last post
  14. for your critiquing pleasure

    I have read and heard it said that the beginning of a story is what hooks the reader. Thus it must be good. Even though I have read some works with...

    Started by Jennifer Hord‎, 06-17-2012 12:36 PM
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    06-18-2012, 05:52 AM Go to last post
  15. Question Tell me what you think. This children's book is along the lines of Seuss.

    NANNA'S BIG BLACK PURSE Nanna's big black purse Holds all things in the universe, She pulled out a rat being chased by a cat Being chased by a...

    Started by Memory Morrows‎, 05-31-2012 03:13 PM
    children"s, silly
    • Replies: 3
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    06-14-2012, 02:47 AM Go to last post
  16. Really people, fellow writers 40 views and not one has the ability

    Or disire to critique my work? Is it because it's a childrens story and you don't think i can write seriously. My first memory in life was being...

    Started by Memory Morrows‎, 06-01-2012 07:26 PM
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    06-02-2012, 11:23 AM Go to last post
  17. Continuing an interesting opening

    Thanks for all the feedback in my other thread guys. I've now written some more and thought you might like to see how the next couple pages played...

    Started by Will Prendergast‎, 05-01-2012 09:50 AM
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    06-01-2012, 06:06 AM Go to last post
  18. Post Please Critique a Poem for My Poetry Book

    "Body Bag" Bloodstained, a tattered veil Upon the battered face Of the Fallen One A wretched sleeve engulfs her carcass

    Started by MichaelHunt2012‎, 05-21-2012 10:34 PM
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    05-23-2012, 04:09 AM Go to last post
  19. a 1000(ish) word excerpt from a new writers 1st effort...

    Hi! This is my first foray into the writing arena, and i sure would appreciate any comments or suggestions. Thanx for reading my work (if u do read...

    Started by voodoogator‎, 05-13-2012 12:03 AM
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    1 2
    • Replies: 10
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    05-22-2012, 04:58 PM Go to last post
  20. Poll Poll: A Strange Man- Introduction/ Rough Draft

    Looking forward to any advice and thoughts, Thank you. Chapter 1 The world fears Andrew Collins, and Andrew Collins fears the world. He has no...

    Started by Max Cooper‎, 05-09-2012 09:34 AM
    • Replies: 5
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    05-10-2012, 01:44 PM Go to last post

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